I don't know, it was a little bit confuzzling how some of it rhymed and some of it didnt... I mean, there's nothing wrong with that I guess, I'm sure there was some kind of eh... structure (I dont know how to put it exactly right, sorry if I use incorrect terminology. I hope you understand what I mean) that I just couldn't see? I don't know. It's pretty good, it's VERY good, and I think you should write some more poetry to share 🙂

I fail at using meter, so I just use freeform. I stress over if its exactly perfect within the meter's structure if I try to use it, so I don't bother.

I see this less as an attack on the hyper-religious as it is an attack on the people who claim to be religious, perhaps even beat their chests about it - but their hearts aren't really into it, as evidenced by their lack of charity toward others, and they blindly follow a particular faith because it is convenient, not because they actually try to live up to its expectations or take the teachings as a way of living.  Or even those who use religion as an excuse to do what they want.

Now, my specialty is more in writing fiction, and I don't really have that much exposure to poetry in general, but for some reason it feels like it goes on a bit long, then ends rather suddenly.  I think the second to last section feels like it could be moved around a bit, perhaps earlier in the poem; and you may want to cut some of the less essential lines out, like the "Day in and day out/People move in and move about/People doubt and
they pout" lines, which feel like they don't contribute strongly enough to the central sense of the poem.  However, I especially like your final lines; they're good and strong, and I think they do well as the final lines of the poem.  Try to aim the rest of the poem towards those final words, and strip away those parts that aren't supporting it strongly enough.  I hope this is helpful.

As for offending people...I'd be less worried about that.  With a fairly strong sociopolitical message like this, there will be people who are offended.  It's a given.  But art is like that.  If you want to make a strong statement, then there will always be opposition.  And art is one of the strongest ways to come across with a message.  As for flaming, flames are against the board rules; I'm sure there will be someone along with a fire extinguisher momentarily if a fire breaks out. 😛  I do appreciate that you don't intend to offend, and it's probably good to mention up front, but there may be those who get offended anyway no matter what you say.

Very much appreciated. Its a rough draft, I intent on changing things and I'll keep what you said in mind. I just felt I had to add a few things in, but this isn't final either, so I've got time to work this around. Thanks Terg. And yes, you are correct about the meaning. I'll not deny I'm not religious and I've had my fair share of people who are "Holier than thou" to make impressions upon me, but I personally think that faith in the good of man should come before faith in a god. They have no faith in humanity, no faith in the goodness of man. No faith in the here and now. Hence the title "Faithless". Also, considering the state of the world, one could argue having faith in mankind takes a considerable degree of willpower, especially these days =P

I'll say it again, I don't mean it as an attack on people who are quietly religious, I have a few friends who are close to me that happen to fall in that line, and I have no problems with them being like that. But I DO live in the southeast, where religion happens to be taken more seriously than it should be.

Again, I'm not trying to piss you guys off 😛

Thanks for the comment, I'd appreciate criticism from anyone else if they like.