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The thread is being used be a FEW people as it is supposed to. The majority of the time people give a one sentence reply to the previous post and never even mention a NAME. See above. This is mainly what this thread is FULL of.

My vote is to remove this thread and recreate it. That way some people can fire off with their character(s) again for a second opinion. But THIS TIME we put in the stipulation in BOLD font that if you fail to provide a semi-constructive reply (At least a paragraph) about another character then your post can/will be deleted WITHOUT notification.

~Rico

I agree with Rico. Not a lot of people really got constructive replies. Asides from the late pages, and begining pages. Critics who just say 'Your char's cool cause I like em.' deserve to be deleted because they give the person who wants help on his character no help at all.

So basically, yes. Lets revamp this topic and give it some flow, eh?

I agree; this thread should be restarted and longer replies with thought and effort put into them should be enforced. Its very annoying to put effort into making a character profile only to have someone say "Oh, cool character", and then that end up being the only reply.

Even if you did write it in bold clearly stating the rules, I still think newbies will overlook this, jump to the last page, and add their own character awaiting feedback such as like here. Deleting their post without notification might be a good way and unclutters rubbish and worthless posts, but then some newbies might get angered at this and complain or take offence, maybe even going so far as to start offending the moderators.

Still, I have no other suggestions and I do agree that something here should be done to clear it up. I agree that a new fresh start might be wise and that Rico's method should be employed, however I'm just voicing somethings that could go wrong with it.

I'm glad to see that someone created a character using knowledge of the Mobian/Overlander "Cold War". Now if only someone would create a Dark Legionaire that does the same for the Twilight Zone/Angel Island conflict...

Here's one of what I hope to be many fan-characters for Flight of the Tornado.

Name: Kara Hamilton
Species: Human
Gender: Female
Age: 18
Rank (Air Force): Captain
Hair Color: Blonde or Red (Varies with story)
Eye Color: Green
Height: 178 cm
Weight: 65 kg

They all thought Kara's father died in the SOLG control room when he was "hit by a ricocheting plane." They were wrong. It turned out that Allen C. Hamilton did very much survive, and a few years later, Kara was born (in an alternate fan-fic which I'm co-authoring, Kara's mother is Kaorinite from Sailor Moon, which explains the variation in hair color) However, in Flight of the Tornado, Kara is the leader of the Neo-Grabacr Fighter Squadron (a.k.a. Squadron 8492A). Her aircraft of choice is the MiG-1.42, the full-production variant of the MiG-1.44 prototype fighter. Kara goes back to what is the present day (25 years back) to eliminate the Wardog, Freedom Fighter, and Chaotix Squadrons. However, she didn't count on someone following her back into the past to stop her. That someone would be Lara-Su, Knuckles and Julie-Su's daughter (From the "Mobius: 25 Years Later" storyline from the Sonic the Hedgehog comic books [Archie]).

Kara's Quote: "I'm gonna finish my father's work by taking this nuke and shoving it right down King Acorn's throat! DON'T GET IN MY WAY!!!"

M'kay, not sure if I ought to say this. But AcornRoyalAirForce, it seems you are a coulprit of pretty much what we're nagging about here.

Fair enough you made a seperate feedback post from your post, but who exactly were you talking to? Okay, only just saw the title.
And to be honest, I can't really see that as a very well filled out paragraph. Doesn't really say much about the character at the end of the day.

Please read the rules next time.

Regarding your post, it is a little cluttered and disordered and it's hard to tell what you are talking about IMHO. Paragraphs and subtitles, and the comma are your friends.

And like in the first sentence, who's 'they' for instance?
I'm assuming from some of the names of the characters, that your character is derived from the Archie Universe? Perhaps you may want to mention aspects such as that beforehand.
Judging at the background/story, whatever it is you wrote there, you're making assumptions that the reader knows all the 'bits and pieces'. In fact, I just see a paragraph with random bits of information. Fair enough you know about your character, but we don't, and therefor it's hard to provide feedback. All I can say about that is, space out your info, put in a lot more detail and maybe try and put some order into background/story, personality, capabilities e.t.c

Note that I am not being rude, but trying to help.

I must apologize. I'm new at RPing and descriptions have never been my forte. I will try harder next time...